| Jurassic ride in Universal Studios |
Last summer holiday, I went on a holiday to USA and that was actually the first time ever in my life. I was so happy because I could go to Los Angeles,met my uncle and played at a lot of theme parks there such as Disneyland,
Six Flags
Six Flags, Universal Studios and etc. My family and I stayed at my uncle’s house, the advantage was that we didn’t have to pay for hotels and saved a lot of money in that case.The theme park I enjoyed the most was Six Flags. There were so many attractions, funs and scary roller coasters, which of course I screamed a lot. We played there the entire day but,the sad thing was that we didn’t have enough time to ride all of the roller coasters. The members of my family who rode the roller coasters were my father, my elder sister and Me absolutely. On the other side, my mother accompanied my little brother in the ‘kid’s side’. It was a tiring day and also an amazing day of my life!
| Santa Monica Beach in LA |
Besides going to the theme parks in USA, I also went to few beaches,one of the beaches is the Santa Monica Beach in LA. The beaches there were so beautiful and some of them were calm. Unless you went there at weekends, I doubt that it would be so crowded. I also learned how to surf, my father was the one to teach me as it was my first time. The first trial was bad but it was getting better later on. It was such a tiring day too and I got sunburn which my skin turned to be like ‘dalmation’.And at last, the best part of the trip, we went shopping! Without shopping this trip couldn’t be much better. We shopped at Third Street Promenade, shopping malls and etc.My mother, sister and I were never too bored for shopping. Even though we shopped the whole day without even taking a rest we were not tired at all. But, I felt pity for my father and my little brother because they were so bored and tired that time because they didn’t like shopping and they needed to follow us everywhere we went to in that shopping time.We also went to San Francisco and had some fun time there.There are a lot of beautiful views and places such as The Golden Gate Bridge and Twin Peaks! It was so windy when we got there but, the views were just the best from all.We rode the famous San Francisco Cable Car System which was so much fun! The waiting time was quite long but it's worthed.We also went to the Ghiradelli Square,it is a famous chocolate factory that now turned to be a shopping centre.The ice cream was very good that the line was so long.The sunset was also very pretty.
Overall, USA was so great. This trip would be the most unforgettable one in my life. I missed my uncle so much and USA too!
| Cable Car ride in SF |
| One of the Sunset |
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This kind of writing is named as Recount because it tells about one's past experiences.
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